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The Grievance by ~s-yl:icons-yl:

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©2004-2009 ~s-yl
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A thing written with a head bleading, a heart almost exploding and lack of sleep.

Texture me, *resurgere

Full work

Those words left here.
The ones i never got to say
Do they matter?
Can you hear me?
I don't think so. though i hope
I wish i could leave this to you
But i can't come near you.
Please forgive me, i don't hate you
It's only that...forget it
Wish it was easy to explain.
Why can't I understand?
Why do I always have to differ?
What comforts everyone, gives me pain
What offends everyone, protects my mind...
I, my, mine, whatever...
I always think about me...
But always bother about everyone but me.
I should have accepted that by now.
I'm weird, i've always been.
Why am i writing this?
A letter to someone I can't reach.
Typical me...
Always late.
Always worrying.
Always fearing.
Is it that hard?
To face certain people?
Thay all hide behind something.
"I got my disease", "I got my grief"
"I got my problems", "I made my mistakes"
Yeah well i have those too you know?
No you don't know, you never listened.
That's why those things didn't stop you...
Like now they are stopping me.

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~zapzoum Jun 21, 2004, 8:49:36 AM
nice text and composition , would have been nice to have the title under centered though but that ' s a detail

good work :clap:
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~s-yl Jun 21, 2004, 8:53:05 AM
Thanks man :hug:

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"I'm dancing in the ashes of the bridges I've burned."
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~s-yl Jun 21, 2004, 9:07:33 AM
thanks dear

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"I'm dancing in the ashes of the bridges I've burned."
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~girlchildAGL0W Jun 21, 2004, 9:18:29 AM
the title doesn't need to be centered, pshaw! :D very nice.

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victim, victim, victim.
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~s-yl Jun 21, 2004, 9:21:14 AM
To each his own opinion my dear, someone likes it tidy and in order. I think this way it fits the dysfunctionl kind of work this is. Thanks for taking a look at it

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"I'm dancing in the ashes of the bridges I've burned."
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~Taynomi Jun 21, 2004, 9:29:29 AM
The flower looks a little bare without any leaves attached to the stem. But then... that seems symbolic of the way you've bared yourself in this piece. As you say, 'fits the dysfunctional kind of work this is'.

The words are very touching! I feel like I'm commenting on something very personal to you... so... I'll just back out quietly now... :blushes: very touching, emotionally...
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~s-yl Jun 21, 2004, 9:37:50 AM
Thanks dear, this was a very sweet comment :hug:
As for the rose yeah i would have loved a more "leavy" one but i couldn't find one last night so i used a fake one i have with me. Though to me it worked "better" because that paper rose was given to me by me girlfriend so to me it rappresents the more inner feelings

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"I'm dancing in the ashes of the bridges I've burned."
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~S-andr-A Jun 21, 2004, 10:39:15 AM
another great piece :nod:
very sad, and the "symbol" of the rose fit perfectly with the words
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S.a.n.d.r.A
Stock ~d0gma / Photography ~s-photography
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~s-yl Jun 21, 2004, 10:57:01 AM
thank you dear

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"I'm dancing in the ashes of the bridges I've burned."
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